I really do adore your stories. I'm glad I decided to randomly read some fanfiction tonight and came across you.
Kakashi thinks about this often, this parallel of sorts that draws the two of them together even though they never directly intersect, wondering what it is that has made them this way. Why he, the strongest member of his team, wasn’t strong enough to keep his companions from death; why she, once the weakest member of her team (probably still the weakest to be honest, probably doomed to remain that way despite the fact that he’s seen her working and sweating and nearly killing herself to overcome that apparent weakness, which is truly nothing more than being the one normal person on a team of geniuses and oddities), wasn’t weak enough to make them want to stay close to her and protect her; why neither of them can let go of their old teammates, regardless of how obvious and incontestable their state of abandonment is.
This paragraph (well, more accurately, the longest run-on sentence I've seen in a good, long while) is very confusing. You might want to consider breaking it up and revising it. I read it three times before I could remember everything in order to make sense of it. I noticed a few other parts with sentences that really should be broken up a little.
Other than that I really adored the fic. I hope that you write a few more KakaSaku fics, because I think you have their characterizations down pat. <3
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Kakashi thinks about this often, this parallel of sorts that draws the two of them together even though they never directly intersect, wondering what it is that has made them this way. Why he, the strongest member of his team, wasn’t strong enough to keep his companions from death; why she, once the weakest member of her team (probably still the weakest to be honest, probably doomed to remain that way despite the fact that he’s seen her working and sweating and nearly killing herself to overcome that apparent weakness, which is truly nothing more than being the one normal person on a team of geniuses and oddities), wasn’t weak enough to make them want to stay close to her and protect her; why neither of them can let go of their old teammates, regardless of how obvious and incontestable their state of abandonment is.
This paragraph (well, more accurately, the longest run-on sentence I've seen in a good, long while) is very confusing. You might want to consider breaking it up and revising it. I read it three times before I could remember everything in order to make sense of it. I noticed a few other parts with sentences that really should be broken up a little.
Other than that I really adored the fic. I hope that you write a few more KakaSaku fics, because I think you have their characterizations down pat. <3